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Made in fall 2011 for my undergraduate application to SCA @ USC.

Prompt for the piece was something like this:
5-page scene in screenplay format about two people who live together, one of whom wants to go out, while the other wants the first person to stay in. Emphasize visual elements.

After doing this, I started using these two characters (at an earlier point in their relationship) for other little scenes and sketches for class.

Feedback is loved :aww: especially comments!

:iconthewrittenrevolution: critiqued [link]
Possible areas for feedback:
- Do the visuals contribute to the story in a meaningful way for you? (Or do they seem like filling?) How so? Other visual-related feedback?
- How is the pace? (Keep in mind that in some parts you're reading information consecutively that would be processed audiovisually and simultaneously.) Particularly: pace of plot development via dialogue?
- Please let me know if I've screwed up on formatting, etc. Still pretty new to screenplays!
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A Sunrise Scene by ~pinballwitch ( Suggested by ^neurotype and Featured by ^Beccalicious )
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~Cortanna117 Dec 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is really well done, I could clearly understand what their goals were and what their past was. And it was also really good in the sense that you really used the prompt well. :)
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:iconpinballwitch:
gah your sig makes me so happy :happybounce: :squee:
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~Cortanna117 Dec 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Yay!!! I'm so glad to brighten someone's day!! :D
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:D thank you!! I was throwing ideas around for this prompt and all of the sudden I was like--outlaws. With smoke in a pink sunrise. And then I was off on a roll :)

...the other prompt for this application? eh, not quite as inspired ;P

glad you enjoyed!
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~Cortanna117 Dec 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I always enjoy a good read, or a good scene (I'm a theater student as well)
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(I actually am not a film student...I considered it, applied, got in, was absolutely amazed by the program BUT...not sure if I really want to do film, and I really dislike L.A. as a place to live--to visit is fun, but it's missing so many of my favorite parts about living in a West Coast city ironically...

good luck with your studies! theater acting, production, both?)
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~Cortanna117 Dec 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Well....I'll put it this way, I'm in highschool still...so a bit of everything. I hope all f your endeavors turn out favorably :)
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^neurotype Dec 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh look, I failed to comment before :B I enjoyed the personality and the western atmosphere in this—it was easy to picture. I'm not well versed in scripts/screenplay formatting at all, but I found the story elements (pacing, visuals) satisfying.
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:iconpinballwitch:
:aww: super duper thank you!! & thanks for coming back to comment :D
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^neurotype Dec 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:la:
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