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A Sunrise Scene by pinballwitch A Sunrise Scene by pinballwitch

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Made in fall 2011 for my undergraduate application to SCA @ USC.

Prompt for the piece was something like this:
5-page scene in screenplay format about two people who live together, one of whom wants to go out, while the other wants the first person to stay in. Emphasize visual elements.

After doing this, I started using these two characters (at an earlier point in their relationship) for other little scenes and sketches for class.

Feedback is loved :aww: especially comments!

:iconthewrittenrevolution: critiqued [link]
Possible areas for feedback:
- Do the visuals contribute to the story in a meaningful way for you? (Or do they seem like filling?) How so? Other visual-related feedback?
- How is the pace? (Keep in mind that in some parts you're reading information consecutively that would be processed audiovisually and simultaneously.) Particularly: pace of plot development via dialogue?
- Please let me know if I've screwed up on formatting, etc. Still pretty new to screenplays!
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Given 2012-12-23
A Sunrise Scene by ~pinballwitch ( Suggested by neurotype and Featured by Beccalicious )
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fir3torqu3 Featured By Owner May 28, 2013
Congratulation! a truly well deserved DD... :clap::clap::clap:

Been out of DA for a very looong time... sure do missed a lot of nice things... :hug:
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pinballwitch Featured By Owner May 30, 2013
:D Thank you!!

:hug:
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AngelSailor Featured By Owner May 27, 2013  Student General Artist
You did it right! :onfire: I can't even believe it. NO ONE here uses proper formatting. It's refreshing and professional and greatly appreciated.
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pinballwitch Featured By Owner May 27, 2013
:o Thank you!! Glad I managed to get it right :)
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Cortanna117 Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012  Student General Artist
This is really well done, I could clearly understand what their goals were and what their past was. And it was also really good in the sense that you really used the prompt well. :)
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pinballwitch Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012
gah your sig makes me so happy :happybounce: :squee:
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Cortanna117 Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012  Student General Artist
Yay!!! I'm so glad to brighten someone's day!! :D
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pinballwitch Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012
:D thank you!! I was throwing ideas around for this prompt and all of the sudden I was like--outlaws. With smoke in a pink sunrise. And then I was off on a roll :)

...the other prompt for this application? eh, not quite as inspired ;P

glad you enjoyed!
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Cortanna117 Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012  Student General Artist
I always enjoy a good read, or a good scene (I'm a theater student as well)
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pinballwitch Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012
(I actually am not a film student...I considered it, applied, got in, was absolutely amazed by the program BUT...not sure if I really want to do film, and I really dislike L.A. as a place to live--to visit is fun, but it's missing so many of my favorite parts about living in a West Coast city ironically...

good luck with your studies! theater acting, production, both?)
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